Reviewer 1	On a side note before reviewing, Anna Sewell most definately *did* intend Black Beauty to be an allegory for the treatment of women in Victorian society. Thesis: The pain and cruelty fashion caused in Victorian society mainly affected animals and women. The focus is clear and distinct overall, the paper doesn''t wander from its origins or purpose to any great degree.	== SELECT == 7: Most helpful 6 5 4 3 2 1: Not helpful at all
Reviewer 2	You seem to be drawing parallels between women''s fashion in the Victorian era and the way they made animals fashionable. The first paragraph is short and somewhat sweet. I think it could use a few more sentences making referencing more of what is to come: corsets, horse reins, etc. Although, I really like your thesis, and it is the most clear one I''ve read. If you want, you could elaborate on the exact social function of each of the items of clothing (I''m considering horseshoes and horse clothing...). Especially since it''s only 800 words so far... and I think you might run out of parallels between woman and horse (and dog..etc). More fun title? Stop! In the Name of Fashion.. before you break a heart	== SELECT == 7: Most helpful 6 5 4 3 2 1: Not helpful at all
Reviewer 3	The direct connection between the mistreatment of animals and Victorian women is clearly established as the thesis of this essay. The author gives great examples of how “corrective” measures were used on animals and women during the Victorian period. I think comparing the bearing rein and corsets was genius. Thesis: The pain and cruelty fashion caused in the Victorian era mainly affected animals and women. The thesis however obvious could have been stronger and taken to another level. I think this thesis is a good start and great points were made to prove it, I just wanted to see a spin but on this that shined a new light on the issue. The conclusion seems very unfinished, when reading I scrolled down thinking there would be more, but there wasn’t, your essay just ended. I was a bit disappointed; I felt there was room to really get your argument going.	== SELECT == 7: Most helpful 6 5 4 3 2 1: Not helpful at all
Reviewer 4	Ahh a different route, how refreshing. Focused throughout but horribly short of the word count. Also, present tense makes things more urgent. Go back and make it all present tense.	== SELECT == 7: Most helpful 6 5 4 3 2 1: Not helpful at all

Organization (Overall quality: .0 )

Reviewer	Comments	Helpful?
Reviewer 1	My browser shows HTML''s as all weird and messy, but that actually has nothing to do with your project so I''m not going to penalize you for it. Your pictures were adressed in the paper, and the overall organization is clear. In the face of my browser screwing your paper up, it actually suffers little, showing an impressive job in terms of its structure.	== SELECT == 7: Most helpful 6 5 4 3 2 1: Not helpful at all
Reviewer 2	Good so far. Very structured. No problems at all. Everything is very organized - picture and text. Like the juxtaposition.	== SELECT == 7: Most helpful 6 5 4 3 2 1: Not helpful at all
Reviewer 3	The organization is at best presented in a mediocre fashion. The paragraphs show a logical transition but it seems that there was little to no effort in the organization other than the obvious here is one thought ending and another starting.	== SELECT == 7: Most helpful 6 5 4 3 2 1: Not helpful at all
Reviewer 4	Of course it''s organized, it''s not long enough to get unorganized. You need a thousand more words. But there''s a lot to write about, I believe in you.	== SELECT == 7: Most helpful 6 5 4 3 2 1: Not helpful at all

Flow (Overall quality: .0 )

Reviewer	Comments	Helpful?
Reviewer 1	The flow is smooth and distinct, and the transitions between topics are clear and well designed. Little to no fluff, its all to the point and a neccesary part of the paper itself.	== SELECT == 7: Most helpful 6 5 4: Average 3 2 1: Not helpful at all
Reviewer 2	In between good and very good. The words pain and cruelty are painfully overused. Grab a thesaurus and have some fun. Some sentences do not make much sentence: i.e. "cannot fulfill its own use to humans and loses any little standing in society." HUH?? Quotes always incorporated nicely on the other hand!! Overall, great paper... excellent use of media to illustrate your point.	== SELECT == 7: Most helpful 6 5 4: Average 3 2 1: Not helpful at all
Reviewer 3	The paragraphs are short, choppy, and loaded with quotes. This essay was a best skeletal, it seems that the basis for a great paper is here, however there is no substance to the words. The entire essay seems like an outline for something that is waiting to be taken to the next level. The intro is very conversational, I would say go for a more traditional and professional approach. The author seems to be uninterested in keeping the reader entertained and drawn into the essay in the beginning, a trend that continues throughout the entire paper. The essay needs more girth in ideas and transitions, to compensate for the onslaught of quotes that are thrown in the essay. In the fifth paragraph it seems it goes on forever because the author uses especially to transitions from one idea to the next. I would recommend taking out especially, or only just using it one time and finding a synonym. The author does a great job of paralleling animals (horses mainly) and women, but the way the information is presented seems to be a vain attempt to just fill the words with paper. The essay did not flow well at all, had it not been for the numerous quotes this paper would really y just be a blob of words. Quotes should enhance the essay/argument you are providing not be the backbone of the entire essay.	== SELECT == 7: Most helpful 6 5 4: Average 3 2 1: Not helpful at all
Reviewer 4	The flow between the pictures and quotes works quite well. You can add more commentary. You should bring it to the present and talk about models killing themselves in the name of fashion, starving themselves...	== SELECT == 7: Most helpful 6 5 4: Average 3 2 1: Not helpful at all