‘One
day when I was twenty-three or twenty-four this sentence seemed to form
in my head, without my willing it, much as sentences form when we are
half-asleep, ‘Hammer your thoughts into unity’.
For days I could think of nothing else and for years I tested all I did
by that sentence [...]” William Butler Yeats (Nobel Prize 1923; cited
in Frank Tuohy, Yeats,
1976, p.51 )
PROJECTS
REVISED FOR 1B, 2B, ETC.
1.
When you get back the hard copy of the project with the instructor's
annotations you are ready to produce the "B" or final version of
the project.
2.
Revise the essay thoroughly and completely, considering the possibility
of RADICALLY revising, adding new material, re-organizing, etc. In
any case, for the revision to count as writing in a substantial writing
component course you must add at least 350 new words.
3. You
must add at least 350 words of new material in your revisions of P1A
(even if you thought you had already done so). This new material is
a "test" of whether or not you have used discovery learning
to avoid the errors and infelicities of P1A. The 350 or more new words can
be all in one unit or scattered throughout, but, like
all your other changes, it must be highlighted somehow, by underlining
or font changes or highlighting with a color pen, or ….. And
of course your final word count must reflect this change. It should
be 350 words higher unless you cut some material: if you did cut some,
note how many words were cut after the word count. Bonus points will
be given for more than 350 words of new material if it is integral
to the project.
As
for what to add, that is up to you, but consult the suggestions from
your readers.
4.
As I said, Revise the
essay thoroughly and completely, considering the possibility of RADICALLY
revising, adding new material, re-organizing, etc. Do
not just “correct errors” or "infelicities" that I have
marked: the idea is to improve all your sentences. (see Hemingway's
comments above.)
4a.
Never just delete a troubled phrase, fragment, or sentence, unless “economy”
is specified as the problem. Do not write around the problem: tackle
it directly. You learn nothing by avoiding the learning process. Find
a better word, phrase, or sentence. Penalty for just deleting or writing
around words marked for change: -10 pts. each occurrence.
4b.
As you rewrite your projects, remember the emphasis on place. Hammer
your thoughts into unity by returning again and again to this subject. Significant
bonus points will be awarded for increases in unity and signs of real
thinking. An obvious way to unify is to have first and last paragraphs
on the relation of your topic to place and keep referring to it throughout.
If the relation of your topic to place is not readily apparent, you have
a chance to explore the relationship between discovery learning and rewriting.
5. Pictures and Quotes. Unless you
failed to add any pictures or integrate any quotes in the first
version of your project, do not add any more pictures or quotes
simply to earn points. In your revision no extra points will
be awarded for pictures or quotes, unless you failed
to add any pictures or integrate any quotes in the first version
of your project. However,
you may need to revise the pictures:
5a. All pictures
are to be in color unless the originals were black and white.
5b. All pictures
and quotes are to be footnoted. The footnotes for the pictures should
supply the label and the complete source, that is, the URL, or the
full bibliographic information, down to the page number. The footnotes
for the quotes should indicate clearly who is speaking in the passage
and supply the complete source, that is, the URL, or the full bibliographic
information, down to the page number.
6.
Make sure the essay still meets all the criteria outlined in Requirements
1A.
7.
When you have finished your revisions, highlight all your changes.
"All" means "all" changes: every word and every
mark of punctuation changed, added, moved, or deleted. You
will only get credit for the changes you highlight.
7a.
If you add a lot of new material in one unit you can just draw a vertical
highlight in margin rather than highlighting each sentence.
7b.
If you omit a word just highlight the spot and write "word(s) omitted" in
the margin.
7c.If
you move a sentence just write a note to that effect.
8.
Print out the highlighted version and put it in your folder with
the previous graded version(s) and all other materials that were
handed in before.
9.
Go back to the computer file version of the project and remove
the highlighting if you did it using the computer. Save
this version as a web file. Word will add "htm" to the file name
and create a folder with the related picture files. Burn the htm
version of P1B/P2B on to a CD with all related files, such as picture
files, in the appropriately titled accompanying folder. In
the case of P2B, also
include the finished, non-highlighted, htm web version of P1B and
all related files. Test
the CD version on a web browser to make sure that the revision
(both revisions 1B and 2B if relevant), work[s] on its own without
calling up the internet. When
you have a good working version, put the CD in your folder. This
CD will enable me to put your projects on our website. If you do
not want your projects "published" in this way, write a note to
that effect and put it with the CD.
(For
the electronic versions of projects 1B and 2B you provide
your final version of the project, with explanations of where
exactly every section should be connected to the MOO, if relevant, WITHOUT
THE HIGHLIGHTING OF YOUR CHANGES.)
10. Hand
in the complete folder with the tested CD of the version without highlighting
and the hard copy with highlighting and all previous materials.
If your project is missing either the CD or the hard copy
it will not be accepted and late penalties will begin.
Remember, ALSO INCLUDE
IN THE FOLDER ALL PREVIOUS PROJECTS WITH INSTRUCTOR COMMENTS.
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