Back-Reviews for my P4A

Focus (Overall quality: 5.6 )

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Reviewer 1


Very helpful, gives specific comments as well as general advice that I used in revising my paper.

Reviewer 2


Helpful concerning that one section, but I feel like it didn''''t adress the focus of my whole paper.

Reviewer 3


Good advice about the whole paper that was useful in revision.

Reviewer 4


Good point, but didn''''t really address the whole paper. Helpful comment, however.

Reviewer 5


I think you followed the Sword structure for reviews, which isn''''t as helpful as it could be. Telling me what I wrote doesn''''t help much, but your real comments did.

 

Organization (Overall quality: 6.6 )

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Reviewer 1


Very helpful

Reviewer 2


I''''m not sure if you understood my metaphor fully..the body parts are the traits. Oh well.

Reviewer 3


Thanks, I did try to clear up my thesis.

Reviewer 4


Great point, I tried to work on that.

Reviewer 5


Definitely a good point, I tried to work on that. Good advice

 

Flow (Overall quality: 5.6 )

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Reviewer 1


Thanks for all the specific examples! Really helpful.

Reviewer 2


THanks for the specific things to fix.

Reviewer 3


GOod advice.

Reviewer 4


Thanks, this was all great advice.

Reviewer 5


The specific examples really helped me in my revisions.

 

 

 

 

 

 Back-Reviews on My P4B

Focus (Overall quality: 5.8 )

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Reviewer 1


My thesis is focused on the "bones" that I tell the reader I will cover with "muscles and skin". I agree that I could put some examples of muscles in that paragraph, but I don''''t think that makes the paper jump around. I also don''''t really understand how I can "hammer home my body analogy" but still "lose some of the clarity". I think it''''s a lot less confusing to have one paragraph about each trait and elaborate with the muscles and skin than to have a paragraph about all three: leadership, joining clubs and organizations, and wanting to be a positive role model or something.

Reviewer 2


Good idea!

Reviewer 3


That''''s definitely a good idea.

Reviewer 4


Thanks

Reviewer 5


Good ideas! I''''ll work on the end of the second and that random sentence.

 

Organization (Overall quality: 6.4 )

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Reviewer 1


Ok, I think I understand what your problem with my paper is now, but I don''''t really understand or agree with your suggestion. I know I don''''t talk about the traits in the thesis, but I outline the traits in the second paragraph. Also, it makes a lot more sense to have paragraphs for each "bone" and then describe the muscles and skin than to have a paragraph for all 4 bones, a paragraph for all the muscles, etc

Reviewer 2


Interesting idea. Thanks for not taking off points! haha

Reviewer 3


Thanks

Reviewer 4


Great, thanks! I understand about the thesis kind of getting lost.

Reviewer 5


Thanks!

 

Flow (Overall quality: 5.4 )

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Reviewer 1


Good advice on connecting the paragraphs.

Reviewer 2


I''''ll work on making it buttery smooth. Good advice.

Reviewer 3


Good idea, this sound like something I definitely need to work on. And thanks for finding the typo!

Reviewer 4


Haha, I see what you mean. I thought it might be a little off-putting to see parallel structure there, but maybe not. The Anne Taylor picture is fashion, but I understand why it doesn''''t really make a clear connection.

Reviewer 5


Yea good point, that sentence is kind of awkward. Thanks