Back-Reviews for my P4A

Focus (Overall quality: 5.6 )

Reviewer	Back-Evals
Reviewer 1	Very helpful, gives specific comments as well as general advice that I used in revising my paper.
Reviewer 2	Helpful concerning that one section, but I feel like it didn''''t adress the focus of my whole paper.
Reviewer 3	Good advice about the whole paper that was useful in revision.
Reviewer 4	Good point, but didn''''t really address the whole paper. Helpful comment, however.
Reviewer 5	I think you followed the Sword structure for reviews, which isn''''t as helpful as it could be. Telling me what I wrote doesn''''t help much, but your real comments did.

Organization (Overall quality: 6.6 )

Reviewer	Back-Evals
Reviewer 1	Very helpful
Reviewer 2	I''''m not sure if you understood my metaphor fully..the body parts are the traits. Oh well.
Reviewer 3	Thanks, I did try to clear up my thesis.
Reviewer 4	Great point, I tried to work on that.
Reviewer 5	Definitely a good point, I tried to work on that. Good advice

Flow (Overall quality: 5.6 )

Reviewer	Back-Evals
Reviewer 1	Thanks for all the specific examples! Really helpful.
Reviewer 2	THanks for the specific things to fix.
Reviewer 3	GOod advice.
Reviewer 4	Thanks, this was all great advice.
Reviewer 5	The specific examples really helped me in my revisions.

 Back-Reviews on My P4B

Focus (Overall quality: 5.8 )

Reviewer	Back-Evals
Reviewer 1	My thesis is focused on the "bones" that I tell the reader I will cover with "muscles and skin". I agree that I could put some examples of muscles in that paragraph, but I don''''t think that makes the paper jump around. I also don''''t really understand how I can "hammer home my body analogy" but still "lose some of the clarity". I think it''''s a lot less confusing to have one paragraph about each trait and elaborate with the muscles and skin than to have a paragraph about all three: leadership, joining clubs and organizations, and wanting to be a positive role model or something.
Reviewer 2	Good idea!
Reviewer 3	That''''s definitely a good idea.
Reviewer 4	Thanks
Reviewer 5	Good ideas! I''''ll work on the end of the second and that random sentence.

Organization (Overall quality: 6.4 )

Reviewer	Back-Evals
Reviewer 1	Ok, I think I understand what your problem with my paper is now, but I don''''t really understand or agree with your suggestion. I know I don''''t talk about the traits in the thesis, but I outline the traits in the second paragraph. Also, it makes a lot more sense to have paragraphs for each "bone" and then describe the muscles and skin than to have a paragraph for all 4 bones, a paragraph for all the muscles, etc
Reviewer 2	Interesting idea. Thanks for not taking off points! haha
Reviewer 3	Thanks
Reviewer 4	Great, thanks! I understand about the thesis kind of getting lost.
Reviewer 5	Thanks!

Flow (Overall quality: 5.4 )

Reviewer	Back-Evals
Reviewer 1	Good advice on connecting the paragraphs.
Reviewer 2	I''''ll work on making it buttery smooth. Good advice.
Reviewer 3	Good idea, this sound like something I definitely need to work on. And thanks for finding the typo!
Reviewer 4	Haha, I see what you mean. I thought it might be a little off-putting to see parallel structure there, but maybe not. The Anne Taylor picture is fashion, but I understand why it doesn''''t really make a clear connection.
Reviewer 5	Yea good point, that sentence is kind of awkward. Thanks