I have never been around snow that actually stayed on the ground. What a site to see. So you didn't go skiing? Just hiking? I have never been skiing either (obviously, since I haven't been around snow). The description of your "adventure" was quite elaborate, so we (the reader) could really understand your experience. Right now, all I suggest is to go through your essay several times just to pick out the grammatical and spelling mistakes. I am sure I need to do the same thing for mine.