The first time I went hunting felt nothing like that, but I am a girl and I did cry after I shot my first dove. Your poem was really good, its funny how some guys can make hunting seem so innocent. My boyfriend loves to hunt and he would so relate to this. I'm glad you did a poem, you are really a creative person. IU have no idea what you should do to improve it, it seemed perfect the way it was. Maybe talk about "your wife" more. . .that was sweet.My stupid boyfriend would never say anything like that. Good job. I had fun reading it.