Noe Alvarado, I really like this essay, Noe. You built the action well, almost to the point where I wanted to see how things looked from the top of the cliff, myself. I could totally relate to the motivation and desire you felt on this hike. To be at the top, to see something you have never seen before. The description of the surrounding scenery was good. Maybe you could have extended the essay with more about why you felt so motivated to reach the top of the bluff, and why you felt such emense loss when you came down. Also, just out of curiosity, I was wondering what kind of rock (ie granite, limestone, etc.) the cliff was. If you put even more in depth feelings into this essay, it will be a winner (for lack of a better word.)