For: Celeste Gonzalez I really enjoyed your story. My favorite part was the way in which you incorporated the readers into your story . It gives the story a human feel. The only suggestion that I would make is that in the beginning you talk about the nature's hymn and briefly describe it and then you go into when you were a little kid. It is a little confusing and hard to go along with. Maybe you could lead into your childhood after you talk about nature's hymn. It is just a suggestion. I thought your story was very entertaining.