For: Noe The way that you use your words to describe nature and the way it made you feel was incredible. You use all the senses to get the reader involved. I almost could smell the greenery that you were talking about. I really liked that aspect of your paper. One suggestion is when you talk about, "this particular visit" we do not know what visit that is or when it takes place or any other background information that might help us, as the reader, understand your experience a little better. I think that you have a great story and I am glad that I got to read it.