Noe, This is a very interesting story, but a good one. I really enjoyed your attention to detail at the beginning of the story but I fell you could maybe add a little more about what else you saw while climbing the mountain. I am sorry that you did not have the chance to get to the top, but you could also look at it from the point that you can go back and do it all over again, this time remembering the water.:)Try to avoid contractions, but as a whole I really enjoyed your paper and it looks good to me.