I think that it is cool that you decided to use poetry to express your nature expierence. One thing though, poetry doesn't have to rhyme. Sometimes it seems like you are stretching a little to find a word to rhyme. But since you are rhyming you might want to have a more defined rhyming scheme,sometimes it is the next line that ryhmes, sometimes it is the third line and so forth. But overall I think that it was very good.