Julie, I really like how you describe everything so vividly. I really can see this place. The pictures help out a lot also. One suggestion, try to incorporate the pictures into the story so that I can see them as I am reading about it. Having a seperate link is frustrating to switch back and forth from while also trying to read. Last, I suggest that you go to the writing center and have someone proof read for grammar mistakes. There are quite a few grammar mistakes, fragments and run on sentences. Just proof read for the little mistakes that a computer cannot detect. Other than that, Good Job.