I really liked your paper, especially your description of the fish and all the creatures in the sea. One thing I did wonder as I was reading your paper was where did this adventure take place? I would probably be able to get a more concise image of this place if I knew where it was. Oh yes, the end of your paper was very good, it tells the reader exactly what you learned from this experiece and what you think nature did for you. This program sounds really cool, tell us more about it. Good work and good luck on your revision.