Jenny, I really like your story of nature and sisterhood. I don't think that anyone else has connected nature to sharing it with others. That is a good theme to carry out in your story. the one main suggestion that I have is grammar. You seem to have some run ons and fragments, some sentences that start with "and" or "but". Just proof read some more. One way you could add new information might be to expand on the little trips individually as to what you saw and felt. Try to have a better transition between each trip also. Very good job. I know you have pictures, maybe you should try a website to post them on. It would make your story ten times better.