Wow, that was really creative. I liked your poem. I have tried writing poems about bitter things, but they could never be long due to the rhyming factor. Nice work. I am not quite sure I undertood the parallel between the beauty you saw in nature, and killing the deer. Maybe you could go into a little bit more detailas to why hunting the deer makes you feel as though you are a part of nature, not just why you enjoy it. Did that make any sense? I hope so.