I know exactly how you felt. When I went to new york last spring break I felt so cut off. It was like I couldn't breath anything but smog and nasty. Even though I really did like it, Im too am glad that I live in Austin where you can find trees and nature that doesn't have such a hand crafted feel like central park. Anyway, If I were you I would maybe add some more description of the nature and things around you. Other than that it was good. I liked how you used quotations they really fit in well. :)