Jenny, I love the beach so much too!! You may want to add more emtions to it, so we can understand better your feelings. Also I found some grammatical errors you need to fix. In this sentence, "We go there and our beach house was huge," go needs to be got, but you could reword the sentence. In this sentence,"After we had swam for a while everyone else made their way to the beach," there needs to be a comma between while and everyone. In this sentence, "Once we got there we were ready to have fun," there needs to be a comma between there and we. In this sentence, "First we rented some jet skis and rode all over the ocean," there needs to be a comma after first". In this sentence, "All the dolphins scattered, all but one," you need a semicolon instead of a comma. In, "I love that noise," you may want to say sound instead of noise because noise carries a negative connotation. In, "I was so sad the leave," "the" needs to be "to." I'm sorry that's so nit-picky, but I thought that it would keep you from having to do it yourself, and we tend to skip over our own errors. Other than, good job!